Sunday, October 30, 2005

November Rain


After quite a while have I come up with another of my poems...Plzz dont bash me if its not good...Here I go:

Come,hold my hand,
Echoed the familiar husk,
Not until you agree,
Fell more as it fell,the dusk.

With those sultry hands she clenched,
My arm into her grip,
The warmth giving me shivers,
Trembled my lower lip.

Drew it back,my limb,
Unwillingly though,
Mind over matters I thought,
Don't let the emotions grow.

Stern as I tried to be,
Nothing seemed to work,
She'd already made her mind,
Nobody,on green,could shirk.

For me,it has rained today,
Intended to enliven me,
Once more,she said,who knows,
Our last one it might be.

My hand reached for her mouth,
To stop the words flow,
My body against her softness,
Unwilling eyes implying no.

Chagrined as she was,
One last time did she try,
This time with a whining plead,
Best she could do was to cry.

How could I have affirmed,
How could I let her go,
No sane man on earth,I thought,
Would let it be so.

I dragged her back to bed,
Its time for your pill,
For that I'm sure she hated me,
Momentarily against her own will.

But moments could it last,
And then she loved me again,
The deepest of her kisses,
And it was her last rain.

If only I would have known,
If only I would have.........................

15 Comments:

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11:25 PM  
Blogger Manju said...

hey archie
well written.But seriously I think this ought to be published elsewhere in some book
neways continue writing this brilliantly so that we can some day be proud to have been with one of the ...... greatest writers.
Ypu must have guessed the word ,right?
well it is ,

3:50 AM  
Blogger jerrymaguire said...

abe is it actually orignal.with all due respect i still think u r not cut to write like this.

8:04 AM  
Blogger @archie@ said...

manju......
thanx....i wud love to be even that!!!!

ashu......
y?????i mean y am i not???n ofcourse it is original!!

4:38 AM  
Blogger Manju said...

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6:47 AM  
Blogger Manju said...

hey I don't know what you guessed but I am sure you guessed it wrong.
But yes I was also like "Has he written it",when I read it.Did you write it while you were awake or just scribbled it after you woke up having an angel's dream(am serious one of my friends wrote like this)

6:50 AM  
Blogger Fleur said...

hey really well written.....i swear u write well man!!
keep up the good work..
hope i see more such good work from u...

8:24 AM  
Blogger @archie@ said...

manju.....
abe thanx yaar!!!

dominique....
tujhe bhi thanx yaar!!!

9:23 AM  
Blogger jerrymaguire said...

A better november rain by the gurus.
When I look into your eyes
I can see a love restrained
But darlin' when I hold you
Don't you know I feel the same
'Cause nothin' lasts forever
And we both know hearts can change
And it's hard to hold a candle
In the cold November rain
We've been through this such a long long time
Just tryin' to kill the pain
But lovers always come and lovers always go
An no one's really sure who's lettin' go today
Walking away
If we could take the time to lay it on the line
I could rest my head
Just knowin' that you were mine
All mine
So if you want to love me
then darlin' don't refrain
Or I'll just end up walkin'
In the cold November rain

Do you need some time...on your own
Do you need some time...all alone
Everybody needs some time...on their own
Don't you know you need some time...all alone
I know it's hard to keep an open heart
When even friends seem out to harm you
But if you could heal a broken heart
Wouldn't time be out to charm you

Sometimes I need some time...on my
own Sometimes I need some time...all alone
Everybody needs some time...on their own
Don't you know you need some time...all alone

9:05 AM  
Blogger @archie@ said...

abe even i love the song....but hope uve realized nothin apart from the title is tepofied!!!

6:26 AM  
Blogger Phoenix said...

good poem, but i dont like the photo much

3:19 AM  
Blogger @archie@ said...

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6:46 AM  
Blogger @archie@ said...

taru.....
oh God!!!so finally i get a comment from the motivators for the first time...thanx!!
waise i thot the pic's good...atleast relevant!!

6:59 AM  
Blogger lavina said...

hey sweety.....do i evn hav to comment .........u knw wht im thinking rite now....dnt u.???????
...its beautiful....all the rest thoughts of mine ...shuld remain unsaid......!!!! muah

8:06 AM  
Blogger @archie@ said...

lavina....
thanx sweetie.....luv u fr that!!!

8:47 AM  

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